an 'almost-tanka' - from a walk in school grounds

Children taken for a walk not somewhere new but in their own school grounds the Isle of Dogs, Tower Hamlets, London UK. Encouraged to look with 'haikai-eyes'. Here's a 10 year old's first refelections:



sun shining on my eyes
like a devil taking over my body
like an ant getting eaten by a spider
the blue sky glimmering
in the sunlight

video made in the classroom after walking in the school grounds before any really formal editing of the work - fresh reactions - not haiku but has haiku-like fragments and phrases - fresh and lively - maybe we can get even more connection by looking at it without the use of 'like' - a move to more of a show rather than tell - lets look...

sun shining on my eyes
a devil taking over my body
an ant getting eaten by a spider
the blue sky glimmering
in the sunlight

whichever - a powerful set of feelings evoked by a walk in the playground a familiar place seen with new eyes

LO

HAIKU HIKE MAIN PAGE

CROSSOVER UK